A New Horizon – #FFfAW

The sea looked calm and serene unlike the turmoil Rishabh felt inside him. Sitting at the bar downing many a drinks, he looked over the horizon. Was his mind playing a trick on him or was it really Pia walking towards him?

………..….

He had met Pia in this very bar 6 years ago. He could remember it like it was yesterday. He couldn’t take his eyes off her from the moment he saw her. That was the beginning of a beautiful love story. Living by the beach with their adorable daughter, they led an idyllic life. But destiny had other plans. He lost Pia to a fatal accident and life as he knew, shattered.

…………….

Hazily he stumbled across the wooden fence and wrapped his arms around her…

It looked all too real then; the words she spoke, her warm embrace…was that all a dream?

It was time to bid a final goodbye to ‘The Chelsea Beach Bar’. He had her wishes to fulfil, her memories to keep alive through their daughter.

 

Photo prompt
183rd Challenge FFfAW – Pic Courtesy Michelle DeAngelis.

 

(173 words)

Linking this post to the 183rd Challenge Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers . The challenge is to write a piece of fiction within 100-175 words based on a photo prompt. Thanks to Priceless Joy for hosting this challenge.

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41 thoughts on “A New Horizon – #FFfAW

    1. Hah…I know there seems to be a disconnect there, but the word limit posed a constraint in adding even a few extra details…It started out as a 450 words story and had to edit to 175 and this is what happens i guess. Let me try editing…and thank you for being so kind about it.

    1. Thank you Iain. This is my first FFfAW attempt. It was very difficult to edit a 450 words story to under 175…I just wish i could have had a few more word allowance…but that’s what the challenge is all about, isn’t it? Thank you for reading and for those encouraging words…Means a lot!

  1. Accepting the reality is not an easy job, specially when you are grieving the loss of the loved one. Life, however, doesnt stop for any one. It goes ahead with its own pace, leaving much to us to match the steps. Happy to see that he is giving it a try to match the steps!

  2. That’s beautifully written and edited to fit into the word limit. Sometimes its really difficult to end such heartening stories because of word limit but you have done a great job. Loved it.

    1. Thank you so much Rashi. This means a lot! because i kept thinking it won’t make sense without elaborate descriptions i had written and editing was such a painful task you know. So your comment is so heartening to read. Thank you for that confidence booster!

  3. Kalpana, I could sense the feeling of loss in Rishabh’s heart and a sudden surge of hope as he thought that Pia was walking towards him. The last line talks of hope and resurgence as well. Word limits can really limit one’s imagination, but you have written a lovely story! 🙂
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    1. Thank you so much Deepti. You don’t know how much this means to me. Because i was doubting myself and wondering how in the world will i be able to convey all this in the word limit proposed. And so your comment is so refreshing to hear and such a confidence booster. Thank you so much for this.

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